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I love the way I can talk to you
And say what's on my mind
I never have to look away
Or keep a thing inside

Tears fill my eyes when you're not around
Or when you just don't care
But I know in my heart you will do what's right
For me, you will always dare

Material things will never matter
As long as I have you
You make every day that passes
So much easier to get through

My worries disappear when you're around
No thoughts of pain or doubt
I feel your love when you hold me close
And kiss me if I pout

I don't care what they are talking about
All I care for is you
I'll jump off a building to show you my love
If that's what I have to do

I love you for everything that you are
Not what you promise to be
I know you can't see why or how
You're the most important thing to me
My first bit of poetry. I tried not to make it too corny but I don't think I succeeded. Please tell me what you think and any tips on how to improve would be greatly appreciated. Inspired by my boyfriend saying "I love the way..." about five times during a GCSE English oral test on a poem called Sonnet 130.
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Dashieandluna Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2015  New member Student Artist
This is so good if you don't mind to see my poems if you don't mind 😔
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Kirbyfan1234 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013   Traditional Artist
I cried when i read this..

This really reminds me of Dedede.. :'}
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kedonsine Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
beautiful
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Lovlyday Featured By Owner May 8, 2012
ok.. the pic on the top with the caption.... check out I love the way you hold me by Jaime grace.
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KomoLove Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I read this at least 5 times this is so great. :iconfavplz:
I really really like it! Good job:D
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Krazypinay Featured By Owner May 24, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i ♥ it!Ü
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MidnightKuro13 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i love it! ...except for the whole "jump off the building for you" thing. I messes with the rhythm and feeling of the poem. but i still LOVE it
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Sammi-Sky Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010
This is amazing, I adore it.
It just pin points how I feel about my boyfriend exactly, It's our 1 month today and my god do I love him.
This is beautiful (:
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Beautiful-Wrath Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
you did a great job i love it.
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dam3t Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010
amazing keep it up sweety
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Jenyaya Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2010
loved this!!~
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tawneybubbles360 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2010
wow I love it its more then grate probably that's because that's the way I feel about my bf right now
Keep it up :)
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Aqua-Aura666 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I think im gonna cry :cries: Thats how I felt about my boyfriend (he broke up with me) and I still feel like that about my ex-boyfriend. I just dont have the guts to tell him, because im affraid to lose him as a friend. I was always told that I don't know what loe feels like, but I think I do.

:sniff: I love it, its beautiful. Keep up the good work.
If you don't mind I would love to print it off so I can show all my friends who are on and not on DeviantART.
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ffmaster198 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2010  Student Writer
honestly... what i think is, Love Is What YOU Make Of It. And Your Ex-Boyfriend may have a different Definition of love. I'm Sure There IS Someone Out There That Thinks the same thing about love as you.
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Aqua-Aura666 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thnx :crying: I hope I find that person soon then. :D
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yenpot Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2010
This one is really really nice..
A heart-melting poem.
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yenpot Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2010
This one is really really nice.. heart melting..
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TackyloveApple Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful
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yruhere555 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
This isn't corny...it's beautiful! Good work!
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animelover4eva77 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW
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Ghost-Girly11 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2010
this is really good.i luv it u did rly good on it ... i would lik too no if u rite alot of poetry on love if you do i wuld luv to send u a invite to my club...im the founder vanessa :)
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sheepcoat Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2010  Hobbyist
Wow that is amazing. I truly love it. Great job.
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Beingmyself89 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2010
Beautiful poem , telling us that when you're in love you'll do anything for tha person..
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angelichope Featured By Owner May 28, 2010
Good!!!
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desireearies15 Featured By Owner May 26, 2010
Aw, that's cute
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Kittyweasle Featured By Owner May 11, 2010
i find this to be very beautiful
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blackberriie Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2010
Woow !! GREAT poem, really!! keep up the good work!:hug:
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Mayon-Ruiz Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2010
I love it!!!
it's so adorable<3
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MagicalSunrise1984 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2010
It is very beautiful.
The question is not if it is corny but if it is real.
Sometimes, as the emotions felt are so refined, such is the poetry - seems to me this is just the case (it really does come from the heart) - so, maybe it is corny - so what?
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libstick Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2010
Awh! It's sooo cute! >3< It's not corny don't worry! =D Love it :heart:
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mr-skateboarder Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I WROTE THIS IN MY VALENTINES CARD TO MY GIRLFRIEND. it speaks to me so much..i love it and your a very good poet. i hope you dont mind, ill be writting your name at the bottom right lol. this is great
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CJDeguevara Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010
Good Stuff
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the-amberpants Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2010
oh gosh, you should be proud. I wish my first bit of poetry was this good... I applaud you... Great piece of work... Made me happy :D
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Ochite Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2010
so sweet.hehe
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i-am-an-avenger Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2009
AWWWWWW..........
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ForeverAlone33 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009
I feel the exact same way for someone!!
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aishiteru-tenshi-4E Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009
i really think it's pretty cool. i love it. really.
you're awesome poetry writer =D
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KawaiiLove1011 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2009
ohmy..this is SO good :';) :hug: :D i faved and cant wait for more
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XPuppet-MasterX Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2009
:iconpiggyplz: I LOVDED YOU PIGGY!!!!!!!
NICE POEM BTW.
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orange-cat-lover Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2009
This is such a sweet poem! I cant belive it's your first, well done! :love:
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Macchii Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2009  Hobbyist
''I love you for everything that you are
Not what you promise to be''

OMG this part *w* :heart:
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luz-anime Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2009
aaw!! so cute!!
I really really loved it!
keep doing that (:
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Antonia-96 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2009
aww sweet <3
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Amber1142 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2009  Student Writer
All love poems are corny but they come from the bottom of peoples heart so it doesnt matter. I only write love peoms so i should know ^-^ your poem is really good
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EUPHEME657 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2009
very nice....
i try a thing or two myself sometimes
its fun!!!
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kasumiharu Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
This got me to cry..This is truly beautiful..Keep up the great work..*gets a tissue* Lol
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666fulya666 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2009
that was in everyway

B.E.A.U.T.I.F.U.L
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julie-d-l Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2009  Student
I Love it:)
Really I do:)<33
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andreeita-91 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2009
i really like because it seems like something that's happening with me..

keep doing it
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mhking04 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2009
this is really beautiful.
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