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I Love The Way You Love Me by ~evilneedscandy:iconevilneedscandy:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Fixed




I love the way I can talk to you
And say what's on my mind
I never have to look away
Or keep a thing inside

Tears fill my eyes when you're not around
Or when you just don't care
But I know in my heart you will do what's right
For me, you will always dare

Material things will never matter
As long as I have you
You make every day that passes
So much easier to get through

My worries disappear when you're around
No thoughts of pain or doubt
I feel your love when you hold me close
And kiss me if I pout

I don't care what they are talking about
All I care for is you
I'll jump off a building to show you my love
If that's what I have to do

I love you for everything that you are
Not what you promise to be
I know you can't see why or how
You're the most important thing to me
©2004-2009 ~evilneedscandy
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Author's Comments

My first bit of poetry. I tried not to make it too corny but I don't think I succeeded. Please tell me what you think and any tips on how to improve would be greatly appreciated. Inspired by my boyfriend saying "I love the way..." about five times during a GCSE English oral test on a poem called Sonnet 130.

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~better4where Oct 7, 2004, 4:04:57 AM
this really is good, you should be proud of yourself. its good in its simplicity and how open it is, i like a poem that clearly comes from raw emotion. this poem actually brought a tear to my eye. it reminded me of when ive been in love. in particular i like the last two lines

I know you can't see why or how
You're the most important thing to me

simply beautiful. i love the idea for this and the way its written. hope to see more soon!

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this isnt it
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~evilneedscandy Oct 7, 2004, 5:11:33 AM
Aww thankyou so much! And thankyou for the :+fav: and watch! :hug:
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~angelfocusbroken Oct 7, 2004, 11:09:21 AM
That is a great poem! I love the way you express your emotions through words. Great job! Can't wait to see more or your literary works! I'm putting this in my favorites!

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How does it feel to be you? How does it feel to be diffrent from me? Are we the same?
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~crimsonpoem Oct 7, 2004, 1:51:20 PM
love it absolutly favoriting it. Very good flow, enjoyed every last word.
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~MLMTMV Oct 7, 2004, 2:45:48 PM
This is a really good poem it is nice that you will share you feelings and your boyfriends feelings with the world congrats your poem is better then mine check mines out some time and plz give me your feed back.
And you really caught how other people feel about their loved one.
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~MacabrePicadillo Oct 7, 2004, 3:29:51 PM
I am a hopeless romantic and as such can see no wrong in this poem. Beautiful, simply beautiful.

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-- Steve Allen
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~xXxWhAtThExXx Oct 7, 2004, 5:01:46 PM
This reminds me of my ex girlfriend this is really cool
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~g2e Oct 7, 2004, 5:34:36 PM
that first paragraph is the cutest. :D

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He experiences every emotion with passion & repays every slight with vengeance.
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~galadriel-lotr Oct 7, 2004, 6:29:50 PM
I dont find it corny at all it was really good you should be proud of yourself!
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~EncouragerOfHatred Oct 8, 2004, 12:28:26 AM
I wouldnt say corny but pure emotion sometimes is portrayed that way im impressed at how easily you put your emotions into words. Most definitely a fav.
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