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I love the way I can talk to you
And say what's on my mind
I never have to look away
Or keep a thing inside

Tears fill my eyes when you're not around
Or when you just don't care
But I know in my heart you will do what's right
For me, you will always dare

Material things will never matter
As long as I have you
You make every day that passes
So much easier to get through

My worries disappear when you're around
No thoughts of pain or doubt
I feel your love when you hold me close
And kiss me if I pout

I don't care what they are talking about
All I care for is you
I'll jump off a building to show you my love
If that's what I have to do

I love you for everything that you are
Not what you promise to be
I know you can't see why or how
You're the most important thing to me
My first bit of poetry. I tried not to make it too corny but I don't think I succeeded. Please tell me what you think and any tips on how to improve would be greatly appreciated. Inspired by my boyfriend saying "I love the way..." about five times during a GCSE English oral test on a poem called Sonnet 130.
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Kirbyfan1234 Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I cried when i read this..

This really reminds me of Dedede.. :'}
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kedonsine Jun 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
beautiful
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:iconlovlyday:
ok.. the pic on the top with the caption.... check out I love the way you hold me by Jaime grace.
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KomoLove Jul 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I read this at least 5 times this is so great. :iconfavplz:
I really really like it! Good job:D
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Krazypinay May 24, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i ♥ it!
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MidnightKuro13 Apr 18, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i love it! ...except for the whole "jump off the building for you" thing. I messes with the rhythm and feeling of the poem. but i still LOVE it
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:iconsammi-sky:
This is amazing, I adore it.
It just pin points how I feel about my boyfriend exactly, It's our 1 month today and my god do I love him.
This is beautiful (:
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Beautiful-Wrath Oct 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
you did a great job i love it.
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:icondam3t:
amazing keep it up sweety
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:iconjenyaya:
loved this!!~
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